What makes a good paragraph

We have been working on paragraphs for the last 3 weeks and this is the last week of making them.  We made this slide to show how to make a good paragraph and this is our success criteria. This is by me and Xavier. Please leave me a quality comment to tell us how to improve our presentation.

KKN World Zombie day

1. Who is the main person or group of people in this news article?all over the  World Zombie Day takes place each year in more than 50 cities, including New York, Paris, Hong Kong, Los Angeles, Chicago and Tokyo.
2. What was the key event from the news article? zombie day is a charity fundraiser.

3. Where did this event take place? All over the world   

4. When did this event take place? October the 13th

Sky Pool for London

1. Who is the main person or group of people in this news article? sky tower London

2. What was the key event from the news article?they built a pool between 2 towers

3. Where did this event take place? in London

4. when did this event take place? August 25, 2015

Youngest person to be fitted with a bionic hand

1. Who is the main person or group of people in this news article? Nine-year-old Josh Cathcart 

2. What was the key event from the news article?  Josh Cathcart he has got a bionic hand


3. Where did this event take place? Scotland

4. When did this event take place? August 26, 2015

hide and seek

hide and seek

1.the tree moves to me slowly.

2.The big waves push me like i was sand.

3.the house stairs at me like i was and outlaw.

4.the grass rushes past me as fast as a lion.

5.the smoke follows me into the street.

6.the ground moves me around like water.

7.the sky crushes me into the ground.

Hide and Seek

1.the tree moves to me slowly.

2.The waves push me like i was a doll.

3.the house stairs at me like i was and outlaw.

4.the grass rushes past me as fast as a chitau.

5.the smoke follows me into the street.

6.the ground moves me around like water.

7.the sky crushes me into the ground.

my fave item word cloud

matariki

Matariki

means a cluster of small stars,and it all so is the Maori new year.

Anyone in the taniwha sight got eaten.

Tradition lasts up to 3 days.

Around the world heaps of

countries celebrate matariki.

Ritual crops planted for matariki.

Is matariki more important than the queen's birthday.

Kids taken from parents to be the stars

If you keep a good eye out in June you might be

lucky enough to see them.

by reilly

Holiday highlights

On the first week of the holidays.We went to the Lego building at the library.Then we  went to maccas. After that we went to lunch.Then we went  to the park for a bit then we went to blaketown school.

Then on the second week we went to the pool and played for 2 hours and corben came.Then we got pizza and went and played at my mums friends house.

On the last week of the holidays I went to Alex's. house and we played COD and assassins creed 3. then we went to the dairy and got really sour lollies!!!!

Boy on a Bike

WALT: use google draw to create a scene from a text

First we read a story called ‘Boy on a Bike’ written by Bronwen Wall. It was about a boy travelling the length of the North Island, on a fat bike, to raise money for the St John Ambulance service.

fat bike : it is a bike that can travel on all different kinds of surfaces

the fox and the girl

I dove under the fence and raced towards the nearest bird.I grabbed it by the neck  and took. off like the wind but i couldn't stop because i had this girl chasing me up the path down the path through the log. luckily i still had the chicken in my jaw but  it got colder and darker the more i ran the more tied i got i kept. on going i was fun it was like tag i was keen and sneaky   

and fast. Had nothing to lose i kept on the chase i just had to lose her oh yeah! I will go to my house she will never get in so i did.I got in but then as soon as it i thought i was safe to leave well let’s just say it was a deadly mistake she court me so i just stared at her with beady eyes then she let me go she started to walk home so i zipped but i started to snow how was she gonna get back i thought it was. snowing heavily so i cuddled into her and we went to sleep we weren't enemies any more know we were best friends.  

by reilly seifert

Anzac poem

As the night of the day dawned war was still ago as every soldiers fighting at there mite the trenches were full of men battling it out for there country the planes begin in the sky dropping bombs and shooting at the enemy's so many lost few to go.